This is very cool, Sabio. (I hate using words like cool, but it really is quite interesting.) The rhyme works very well and the cadence has a stately quirkiness – there is something quite wonderful in the way that the industrious bees tie it all up – particularly with the beginning of the moon. The bees also have little choice in all this it seems to me! Also there is a terrific zig zag here between the grand and the little/homey – from moon to bees -emperor’s to grandmother’s chin, and birthday wish – k.
"I hate that ordinary citizen-readers have been made to feel intimidated by poetry, when in fact it can be so much fun, and so lucid, insightful and contemporary. In this I am very much on the Garrison Keillor culture-team. A poem is a conversation or an encounter with a deeply committed, highly entertaining friend."
-- Tony Hoagland (poet)
"A sad literary irony is poets who crave to be understood but don't write as if they do."
-- Sabio Lantz (a non-poet)