In vineyards grapes blush deep bouquets so ripe.
Rich fields with love fill oaken casks with port.
Sweet hymns and praise that flow from acolytes,
believers faith inspire and souls transport.
Our faiths like vines’ rich fruit, our hearts make gay
so saddened lives forget dark pasts of pain.
Shiraz, Merlot, Rosé and Cabernet
turn frown to smile relieving dreams past slain.
Allah and Yahweh filled with Bacchus-rage
fill streets, church aisle, masjid and home with hate
And change good men to pawns upon a stage
light flames, burn vines, crush lives, and joys negate
Kafir, like pagans’ rights and life are stole
by faith-filled drunks who claim but they have soul!
–by Sabio Lantz, 9/14/12
Prompt: dVerse : Write a sonnet
Above was is my first sonnet! It is suppose to be Shakespearian in form which requires the following:
- Lines: 14 lines with 10 syllables each
- Meter: iambic pentameter
- Sections: 4 sections: 3 Sicilian stanzas + 1 couplet:
- Structure: Metaphor, Expansion, Twist & Punch in the 4 sections
- Rhyme pattern: abab, cdcd, efef, gg
Whewww, that was a tall order at the dVerse Bar prompt! Though compliments are coveted, even more highly I would appreciate suggestions, corrections, direction, criticisms or thoughts.
- ‘Allah’: the Muslim god
- ‘Bacchus’: the Greek god of wine
- ‘kafir’: a derogatory word for a non-believer in Islam
- ‘masjid’: a Muslim mosque, Arabic “place of worship” (accent second-syllable)
- ‘Yahweh’: the Jewish and Christian god
- Setting: I wrote this sonnet while embassies burn in the Middle East. I used to work in a US Embassy in Western China — it was burned to the ground by rioters the year after I left. Religion is not the only tool used to nurture hatred — patriotism does the job equally well.